Monday, December 29, 2008

Mirage

Having reached so far, I find you but not you,
Now Nowhere to turn to, I should end up with you and only you.

where I went wrong, I cant see it better you tell me,
Pity it is, with loss of originality, even you cant tell me.

Here I am with all my life for even a not so you of you,
Coz I have a feeling that u can still be seen only through you.

And I shall wait till that moment though temporary comes,
As for me its not time that matters, my beloved "you".

12 comments:

Day Dreamer said...

Lovely....

su said...

I used to think that deep meaning poems, as we read in poetry books can only be written by professional writers...
I am proved wrong.
Beautiful Poem -- beautifully written...beautifully expressed.

mohit said...

Thanks Sandeep for you comments. They are encouraging.

Swati, Thanks. Well to be honest, I had started from ambiguity but ended up with deepness. I could yesterday feel that I was further ahead than what I had tried for.

Its nice that you can feel the deepness of poem. Thanks for comments.

Umesh Shukla said...

Liked the way you weaved a sense of skepticism along one's love feelings (That's what I interpreted, Please add if you put other things too).
Keep it up, Man!!!

siddhartha deo said...
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siddhartha deo said...

it is beautiful like always...

mohit said...

Hii Umesh,
Thanks for your comments. Well that is your interpretation. For me skepticism was not the idea, but I can see poem in your light too. Thanks.

mohit said...

Hey Siddhartha,

Thanks for your comments. I had read your earlier comments. I would like to know why you deleted them?

siddhartha deo said...

actually...i felt the poem is already too good :)

mohit said...

Thanks man. I am flattered :-)

workhard said...

That is so sweet. its such a subltel and heart felt poem.


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mohit said...

Thanks "Work From Home". Nice to see good comments for the poem.